I wrote a story once where the protagonist came home to ask her estranged father for help. She was desperate. It was the only reason she was even at his door. In the background a storm brewed and she stood staring at him in the pouring rain. They hadn't seen each other in 15 years and her father was a bitter man. She had no where else to turn. Lightning crackled. Thunder boomed. The wind tore at her clothing and rain drenched her back. I thought, wow awesome atmosphere. Will he take her back?
My editor's reaction was very different. She thought the whole thing was too melodramatic and cliche. Did I have something else?
Lesson learned. Contrasting setting lends itself to story questions, tension and suspense. It keeps the reader turning pages. Think serial killer who is a popular teacher at an elementary school. Scary, right?
How much different my story would have been if I set my desperate character facing her father on a bright sunny day at a church carnival with children laughing and running around them. Balloons and cotton candy smells fill the air. Her father could turn his back on her with no guilt. Play with the other children as if she didn't exist. The party atmosphere would have left her feeling isolated and alone and perhaps more desperate then before. She would have to beg in the sunshine in front of witnesses. The happy atmosphere in sharp contrast to her desperation.
Carefully choosing seasons and setting with an eye toward the unusual will create a story that is a fresh and vivid. Think about atmosphere that contrasts mood for a more sophisticated, realistic story. One that makes the reader look around and think--this could be here. It could be now. It could be me.
Cheers!
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Ooooh. I love your advice. Give the setting a 180 and see how that changes the mood in the story. Thank you so much.
And I just gotta know, did you ever try that "dad help me please" scene at a carnival?? How'd it turn out?
Hi Linda, no, I didn't. That book is sitting in my computer. I should dust it off. lol. I'll add it to my new years list. Cheers!
Your good advice made me realize that I don't think about setting or season as much as I should. I'm going to make it a point to play around with it more in my WIP. Thanks.
Hi Jane, thanks. When I first started writing I would set the books in the season I started writing it in. lol. Now I think about it more. Cheers~
I choose setting sin which I've spent a lot of time, so I know the feel of them. The book I'm writing now is almost done, but when I revise it, I'm going to add more "layers" of setting...a sentence here and there giving the reader a better sense of place.
I do that too, Anita. When I revise I layer in more setting. :)
Thanks for stopping by.
Quite often the season can become almost a character.
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